MBA Admissions Tip: Essay Polishing
The deadline is looming and you’re making one final pass through your application before hitting submit. This isn’t the time for drastic changes – but there might still be an opportunity for small improvements.
Read on for three big picture, “crunch time” tips!
Keep It Professional
It’s true that many schools ask “fun” questions and most urge applicants to be themselves rather than submitting “overly polished” material. But it’s important to remember that this is a graduate school application, and you should approach your essays with a degree of formality.
You do want your unique narrative voice to come through, but even professional writers know to vary their tone based on their audience. Before you submit, scan your materials for slang or overly conversational speech patterns in your writing.
Emphasize Action
Lapsing into the passive voice is a common essay-writing pitfall. This means constructing sentences about how some unseen force or agent acted upon something or someone else (e.g. “we were required to” or “the project was completed”).
Instead, make sure that you’re putting your own thoughts and actions at the fore. By making a conscious effort to write “I/he/she did x” rather than “x was done to y” you can make your comments more informative, dynamic and, often, more concise.
Avoid Repetition
It’s often a good idea to give the reader a sense of an essay’s direction through an introduction, and to sum up the key ideas through a conclusion. Ideally, though, each sentence of an essay will add some new information to the document or build the reader’s understanding of what you’ve already written. And for shorter essays (e.g. 250-300 words), you can probably dive right into the content rather than giving the reader a detailed road map at the outset of your response.
So if a sentence isn’t saying anything new, it’s probably safe to cut it. This rule can be particularly helpful with last-minute edits if your responses are running over the word limit. It also helps to ensure that you’re including as much relevant information about your candidacy as you can within the allotted length.
Good luck with those finishing touches!
MBA Admissions Academy
In addition to the MBA essay tips above, learn more from Clear Admit’s Admissions Academy below.
Episode 12: Essays I: The Basics
MBA Applywire
I have about 4 years of experience at a financial derivatives advisory firm, where I'm a Vice President advising real estate and equipment-finance clients on hedging strategies. My firm is very small. which means, I am asked to take leadership roles. For example, I lead our largest client relationship, and I get to present to clients' executives and investors. Before this, I had one year in a mid size public sector consulting firm and before that, I had a year of service in the AmeriCorps, working in homelessness services.
I have a 3.58 GPA from a good but not top tier public university. At graduation I have 150 credits, which meant I was able to graduate with two bachelors degrees. They were a B.S. in Math and Economics, and a B.A. in History.
Outside of work, I volunteer roughly 120 hours a year with a hunger-relief nonprofit a and serve as a junior board member. I also organized my company's first ever annual day of service, which we've continued for 3 years. My personal interests include collecting vinyl records, and learning ancient History.
Post-MBA, I want to build on my background in real estate capital markets to move into banking on the lending side, with a particular focus on real estate. I like the real estate world, but I want to work at a bank as I think a larger institution would provide more opportunities for growth in the larger world of finance.
I am struggling to decide which schools to apply to. I keep adding programs to my list, and I already think my list is too high. My brother wants me to apply to Stanford because he's moving to the Bay Area, but I don't think I'd be competitive. My dream school is Wharton, but I think it's a long shot.
Also, in case it's relevant, I am a 28 year old White male from Pennsylvania, and a member of the LGBTQ community.
My low cgpa was as a result of working part time during my undergrad to cover my expenses and mostly for experience. Parent's business run into financial challenges made things difficult because i had to pay my fees. had CGPA of 3.0+ in 3rd and 4th year in my undergrad(60 credit hours). currently work in commercial bank in CX with 4yrs Work Exp. It will be 6yrs when I apply for the MBA ,I will be promoted to a different unit soon. pro bono consulting for young entrepreneurs. Led youth groups at church and organize capacity building events.
Plan on writing the GRE with 330 as target.
Hoping for a significant scholarship
1. I want advise on how to build my profile to make me an ideal candidate for R1 acceptance and $$$
I have worked for over 10 years in sales and business development and I am currently completing a PostGraduate Diploma in Banking and Finance and I need an a good MBA to enable me pivot into financial services.
Currently working in consulting with a major FMCG/alcobev client, mainly across analytics, supply, and business problem-solving work. Over time, I’ve realized I enjoy understanding why problems exist within organizations and how teams, systems, and decisions can work better together, which is what’s pushing me towards strategy consulting and an MBA.
A lot of my interest in business also comes from seeing how everyday products and operations work behind the scenes. Outside work, I co-founded and ran a digital literacy initiative (1yr 2mo) during COVID where we helped elderly individuals and women from underserved communities learn basic digital tools to stay connected and manage daily activities during lockdown.
I’m currently preparing for the GMAT and exploring schools such as LBS, Fuqua, Ross, Tuck, and a few reach schools depending on how the score progresses.
MBA LiveWire
Rejected after being kept on waitlist for 6 months. Annoying but am anyway committed to Dartmouth
a bit of a bummer but that's okay. got into several other great schools :)